Nebel Ahoi!

[intactrods]

need critique of pure reason and your experience create a sound about this track

http://soundcloud.com/intactrods/nebel-ahoi

[SNM]

It sounds good, my only suggestion is; it needs a beginning, you have a solid middle and end but .. tease it in a lil bit. Perhaps some humanistic elements in an intro like a nice vox sample or some kind of analog instrument melody to set the tone.
In the final mixdown for this, I would turn back the mids a tad and slightly bump the low end, but that is just a matter of opinion.
I Hope this criticism is constructive for you. And thank you for taking the time to share your endeavors

[Vojeet]

Yep, definitely an intro would be nice and some high sounding pads, to loosen some parts in the track.
I just did get up to criticize the sound, but this track need some warmness.

[intactrods]

add litl pad at intro + spread stereo main synth + change some EQ
your opinions??

http://soundcloud.com/intactrods/nebel-ahoi

[intactrods]

almost forgot: i washed the dishes ... although i do not know how it affected the sound

[SNM]

Yeah I can definitely hear the difference, tune is heavy man I dig it

[intactrods]

thanx. i am happy

[Vojeet]

Me too, have left some comments on soundcloud. :)