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need critique of pure reason and your experience create a sound about this track

http://soundcloud.com/intactrods/nebel-ahoi

It sounds good, my only suggestion is; it needs a beginning, you have a solid middle and end but .. tease it in a lil bit. Perhaps some humanistic elements in an intro like a nice vox sample or some kind of analog instrument melody to set the tone.
In the final mixdown for this, I would turn back the mids a tad and slightly bump the low end, but that is just a matter of opinion.
I Hope this criticism is constructive for you. And thank you for taking the time to share your endeavors

Yep, definitely an intro would be nice and some high sounding pads, to loosen some parts in the track.
I just did get up to criticize the sound, but this track need some warmness.

add litl pad at intro + spread stereo main synth + change some EQ
your opinions??

http://soundcloud.com/intactrods/nebel-ahoi

almost forgot: i washed the dishes ... although i do not know how it affected the sound

Yeah I can definitely hear the difference, tune is heavy man I dig it

thanx. i am happy

Me too, have left some comments on soundcloud. :)